From Beijing I would cross the north part of the country to Inner Mongolia. In Huhehaote I would explore the grassland, taste milk tea and listen to folk music. 这个层次中的From Beijing…to Mongolia是承上启下，发挥连接作用的短语，即介词词组也起连贯作用。

第四个层次共四句话，但四句话间仍缺乏连贯性。让我们使用多种方法把它们合为一句：My next stop would be Jiuzhaigou, a place in Sichuan Province which is very attractive for its undisturbed nature covered with trees, flowers and water falls. 修改后句中的next是一承上启下的过渡词，连接了上下文。另外，九寨沟后面的同位语a place in Si Chuan Province，是必须要充实的内容，因为九寨沟毕竟是个太小的地方，用同位语比另写一句更加连贯。同位语后面还带出了一定语从句，这定语从句也比另写一单句连贯得多。

第五个层次的句式仍然单一不连贯，请看修改后的句子：

Having seen enough nature by this time, I would head east along the Yangtze River to Nanjing and Shanghai, for both cities are considered as a pair of shining pearls on the river.

句子开始的分词短语发挥了很好的连贯作用，这一作用是通过分词短语的形式总结归纳前面旅行的内容而实现的，因为去呼市和九寨沟都是为了欣赏自然景观。此外，句子中其他的词也发挥了黏合作用，如On the river与前面的the Yangtze River呼应；a pair of shining pearls与both cities呼应，both cities 又与Nanjing and Shanghai呼应。这是一句连贯性非常好的句子。

第六个层次共五句话。原文中的As we all know…ｓｏ等也有连贯作用，但是用得不够好。请看修改后的句子：Continuing south, I would visit Hang Zhou, a “paradise” on earth. Here I would go boating and take pictures in the beautiful West Lake. 文中的Continuing south 起承上启下作用，这一分词短语同上一层次的Having seen enough nature by this time功能一样。Hang Zhou与a “paradise”是同位语。

第七个层次请先看修改后的句子：At this time it would be necessary to count how much money I still have. If a tour of Guangdong Province were still possible, I would stop in Guangzhou and Shenzhen. But by this time my money would run low, there is only one place to end my trip—Tianjin, my home town. 修改后的句子又加了一些内容，这后加的内容完全是为后边的ｂｕｔ作铺垫，使

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